ninehertz

1. • Sheldon
   • lol apaprenty you are supposed to write them liek this according to monster i dont know though
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     As an experienced Co-ordination manager, having spent a large amount of time focusing heavily on cost reduction, improved quality levels and improved production timescales, I feel I can contribute substantialy to re-enforcing a company’s strong position in its field and aid it in its growth by bringing new technologies on board, embracing change without loosing sight of company goals and always leading the company in a positive direction.
   • [21:34 on 08/09/08]
2. • Carey
   • How about....
     
     
     Sheldon says:

     As an experienced Co-ordination Manager, having spent a large amount of time focusing heavily on cost reduction, strengthened quality levels and improved production timescales, I feel I can contribute substantially to reinforcing a company’s strong position in its field and aid it in its growth by bringing new technologies on board, embracing change without losing sight of company goals and always leading the company in a positive direction.
   • [21:41 on 08/09/08]
3. • Sheldon
   • you are god :-) thanks
     
     now i jsut need someone to check the rest of my bad CV ha ha
   • [21:44 on 08/09/08]
4. • Carey
   • i'm not good at what you should actually write, just spelling and shit...
   • [21:45 on 08/09/08]
5. • Sheldon
   • found some more mistakes aswell im rubbish at this writing lark
   • [21:47 on 08/09/08]
6. • Carey
   • nah, it's good, just needs some minor tweaks.
   • [21:48 on 08/09/08]
7. • Ben
   • Some shorter sentences would go down better I think. Try reading it aloud and you'll see what I mean.
   • [08:05 on 09/09/08]

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